Daily UX Writing Challenge: Day 15 (Final)

I just found out Dribbble really can only put certain size too...I'm so sorry for the image cut, the final one is supposed to be big though.

I'm going to write all the challenge scenarios here:

Please do one of the following:

Challenge 1: Using the browser on your mobile device, please go to Facebook and log in. Tap the menu icon and then tap Create New Page in the Pages section.

Your task: Rewrite the page creation and user onboarding experience. Be bold and take risks.

Or:

Challenge 2: Write a multi-screen registration experience for a car-buying app that lets users view discounted prices. The app also enables dealers to call and email the user so they’ll visit the dealership to buy a car.

Or:

Challenge 3: Write a multi-screen onboarding experience for a banking app that automatically pays a user’s bills every month — as long as they set it up correctly.
Character constraints per screen (all challenges):
Headline: 45 characters
Body: 100 characters

I choose the first one, redesigning Facebook page creation onboarding page.

I only put the revised version here (if there's any) since Dribbble doesn't seem to allow multiple pics per post. I write the full process and bigger image of this challenge here: https://medium.com/@siti.rahmadini29/daily-ux-writing-challenge-day-15-final-5dc530848a6e

And here's the masterpost if anyone wants to see the rest: https://medium.com/@siti.rahmadini29/my-dailyuxwritingchallenge-masterpost-f45658c66a88

Feedbacks are highly welcomed, I would really appreciate it! Thank you so much in advance!